Scene from Concept 12 that uses all terms (Ranbir, Ruthe & Elizabeth)

FADE IN., WANDA and ALBERT are parking by the sideway.

INT- WANDA and ALBERT get out of the car and start walking down the street of Summers Dr. neighborhood
PAN of Summers Dr. neighborhood
DISSOLVED To Wanda and Albert's face.

WANDA

This is such a beautiful neighborhood 

honey, why don't we just live here?

SFX of cop cars passing by. 

ANGLE ON the cop car. 

ALBERT

Actually, i don't think it's a very 

safe neighborhood

CU close up of Wanda's face making the puppy dog eyes. 

Albert

Fine, but if we get killed, it's 

going to be your fault. 

ECU close up of Albert's worried face. 

(V.O.) 

Oh no, what has Wanda gotten us 

into this time.. 

FADE TO BLACK The end. 

                                                            

Concept 38 #1 & #3

1. I don't think ive ever had a conflict that they before. I've never had an ugly conflict because of the different personality.

3. Hero- loving
Crazy
Sensitive
Villain- time.
Fast & evil.

Concept 36 #3

The main conflict for the main characters is going to be that he has to remember his wife, because a while ago he got in a major accident.
Easy ways would be like performing surgery, not getting in the accident
The surgery could go wrong.

Concept 35 #1-3

1. A. Star wars
B. harry potter

2. To be honest, If I was in harry potters shoes, I'd give up. He doesn't give up until voldemort is dead. That's courageous, & I'm pretty sure I would give up against him.
Maybe if I didn't give up, I'd be scared, but I'd practice spells & make myself an awesome wizard/sorceror

3. The last time I took a risk was letting my cat sit in my lap, I have a really bad history with cats, & I've always liked them, but I didn't like going near them too much. I took a risk & let it sit in my lap. Consequences would be still being afraid. The cat didn't hurt me after all. I was definitely satisfied with the outcome.

Critique on nonlinear scripts

I read ruthes script. It's about a man that lives in a senior home. His wife passed away a whole ago so now he's alone. He goes back in time to when he's going to propose to her.
This is nonlinear because he goes back in time. Rewinding.
The conflict is him going back in time. One thing I liked was that she explains the main character in such little words. When you read it, you automatically know what kind of person he is.

Concept 34 #2

Id have to get invisibility.. To get the power I'd have to be smart.. I'd have to use my brain, & think like a villan.

Concept 32 #2

If i had to do a 30 second commercial on insuring a person's possession against damage or loss, i'd state the facts, i wouldn't make it like other commercials' where they just lie to get the audience's attention. I'd state the facts, and i'd have true customers show the audience how it is to have this type of insurance.

Concept 28

For my last birthday, i spent the whole day with my family.

INT Day- Brushing my teeth, come out to see my brother has made me a wonderful breakfast.
INT Day- At the mall with mom, shopping.
INT Day- At home, and cousin came to visit.
INT Night- At the grocery store, picking out a cake with cousin.
INT Night- At home eating pizza and just hanging out with my family.

Concept 27.

I'd have Thatcher ask his question to Linda, in a dark cemetery. We could start out as Thatcher following Linda, and then he follows her to the cemetery. I could further story by adding some action. Linda could be a vampire that goes to the cemetery every night. When she sees Thatcher, she won't recognize him, and start to fight him. Until he succeeds the fight, he can't ask her. He can't beat her, until he finds a cross on the ground. He finally beats her, and then she gives up and asks for mercy. He asks her if he can copy the algebra homework. At first she says no, but then he tells her that he'll get kicked off the team if he fails. She still says no. Then he blackmails her, saying that if she doesn't let him copy, he'll tell everyone in the school that she's a vampire. Than having no choice, she says yes.

Groundhog Day.

The movie "Groundhog Day" uses nonlinear structure by repeating the same day over and over again, until the main issue is resolved. Run Lola Run also uses the same structure, by repeating the same day over & over. In Run Lola Run, the repetition of days is only 3 days, while in Groundhog day, it's more than 3. The nonlinear structure makes the story more interesting.

Pilot Critique #4

This script was also one of my favorites. It has to do with a very common teenage issue. I really wanted to know what would happen. This was a really interesting script. The only problem it had was some grammar. Other than that, it was really good! Format was good.

Xavier's script.

This was one of my favorite scripts. I've never read or watched a story like this. The language was inappropriate, but i'm sure they can fix that. Even though it's inappropriate, it goes with the story. The suspense was amazing. It really made me think, what's going to happen next? Is the guy gonna start his young years over & make them better? I'd really like to read more scripts from this group. The format was absolutely correct. No mistakes, that i caught.

Pilot 2, 6th period.

I've always liked scripts with action in them, and this is a script that includes action. It was pretty interesting. They followed through with everything. It was a script with a twist, very interesting.

Pilot 1, 6th Period.

The story was a typical thing that would happen between friends. I liked it, even though it was common to me, it was interesting. The format was good. It got a bit confusing at times and hard for me to follow.

Critique Pilot #3

This story was interesting. It makes you want to read more & find out what's going to happen next. The format was good, but one thing they need to improve on is grammar and punctuation.

Critique Pilot #2

This story was very good, but i suggest making it more mysterious, something that will make the reader want to read more. The format was good.

Pilot Critique #1

Robby and Julianna's scene was pretty good. It has to do with youth and typical youth issues today. The format was pretty good.

Structure of eternal sunshine of the spotless mind

The structure of this film was more different than the other films we've seen. This one was more confusing than the others. It was kind of rewinding back in time like all the other nonlinear films we've seen. It also went forward to help the audience understand what's going on. Both of them had their memories erased of eachother, but then they meet at the beach & it all starts again. This movie was pretty awesome! But I did get kind of confused.

Concept 33 #1

1. Once I was in the library & i was volunteering. I was pretty confused on what to do & I didn't want to ask the person in charge because I'd feel stupid. I guess this random guy that worked there knew i was confused. So he came up to me, said hi, and started helping me out. He showed me where all the books went, & how to organize them. I thought that was really sweet, because I didn't even know him.