Critique Pilot #3

This story was interesting. It makes you want to read more & find out what's going to happen next. The format was good, but one thing they need to improve on is grammar and punctuation.

Critique Pilot #2

This story was very good, but i suggest making it more mysterious, something that will make the reader want to read more. The format was good.

Pilot Critique #1

Robby and Julianna's scene was pretty good. It has to do with youth and typical youth issues today. The format was pretty good.

Structure of eternal sunshine of the spotless mind

The structure of this film was more different than the other films we've seen. This one was more confusing than the others. It was kind of rewinding back in time like all the other nonlinear films we've seen. It also went forward to help the audience understand what's going on. Both of them had their memories erased of eachother, but then they meet at the beach & it all starts again. This movie was pretty awesome! But I did get kind of confused.

Concept 33 #1

1. Once I was in the library & i was volunteering. I was pretty confused on what to do & I didn't want to ask the person in charge because I'd feel stupid. I guess this random guy that worked there knew i was confused. So he came up to me, said hi, and started helping me out. He showed me where all the books went, & how to organize them. I thought that was really sweet, because I didn't even know him.

Reflection on Psycho

What's creative is that they put the conflict as something completely unexpected. I didn't expect the killer to be the guy dressed up as his mother. Most of the humor was only in the beginning, well at least that's what i noticed.

Concept 25 #3

My logline would have to do with my baby brother & baby cousin doing something stupid, but funny, in the house.